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Question

Depression

Such distress makes me ponder

The underlining of my lifes ambitions

Incapable of seeing the light

But still pushing on through darkness

To an even darker time it seems

Depression sees no end

It engulfs my dreams

And leaves only ashes on my grave

Answer 1

i agree with the first person on some parts ni think that it needs a little inprovement not wanting to be rude or sound mean  just a litlle improvement... for example I (just me) think that you kinda just put in sentences that dont go with each other..... other then that i think it was a great poem and you should keep writing.....

Answer 2

wow, uhm... depressing is the perfect title for it.

I am not into this one too much, it seems too story-like for me.

Decent concept though... Maybe a tad too depressing, but if that is what you are into, who am i to judge. I was into that sort of thing for a while....

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