Tell me what you think of my poem? Please be honest! ?

Question

You scream, you shout

but i can't let it out

you yell, you curse

but all i can do is write this verse,

to tell you that i'm sick of your logic.

Its pathetic how you always have to have it your way.

But not today!

Today i'm standing my ground

I'm gonna scream, I'm gonna shout

I've got to let it out.

I'm gonna show you how i feel inside

Through the years you've pushed and you've pulled.

Now I'm losing my hold

on my sanity

Why can't you see what you're doing to me

You're pushing me over the edge.

But now I'm gonna pull myself back over and show you how it feel.

Answer 1

Thats nice. Yes, I am honest. Sorry if you are a male but i can feel a streak of feminism in it. The urge to come out and stand against the chauvinist who always stamp you down I like the rhymes. There is a whole lot of rhythm too.

Answer 2

Love it!!!!!!!!!!

Would make a nice song as well!

Keep on being so strong!!!!!!!!!!

Answer 3

Tonight seems to be Doggerel Night at Yahoo Poetry!

Cliche, repetition and hokey expressions are okay when one isn't writing seriously. This was fun. Let's do it again.

Doggerel : noun. A comic verse of irregular measure; "he had heard some silly doggerel that kept running through his mind"