Tell me what you think of my poem......?

Question

I have a poem that expresses my feelings of hearing loss. I really do put this personal of how I feel about this.

To achieve in something is to earn. I have my heart set on that dream. Something I wish to hear like you. Sometimes I don't want to hear at all. In my world, I am a bee, always vibrating energy - inside, with few ways to express outside. How is it possible to find hope? A Dream of Mine I cannot remember how to hear I was a baby when the sound was gone Sometimes I ask, if I get the chance, yes,I'd do anything to trade in my hearing If there's a cure, I'd be the first person to hear No matter what I do, I dream on, my hope in my heart.I am happy for who I am -No one could change me. In my ears, it is a tunnel with no sound I see the light on the other side of the tunnel and think: sound. There are good reasons to not be able to hear,yes? and I meet lots of people who can't hear. My grandma understands me she smiles and holds my hands you don't need to hear to love.

Answer 1

Well, it was very poetic.

I really love how you express your feeling in such detail!

As long as you put /your/ emotions into a poem, it's perfect.

Keep on writing, sweetie.

Answer 2

not to bad keep up the good work

Answer 3

This is not written with spaces between it, to make lines and stanzas like poetry often hads. What's up with that. I think it's more of a philosophical prose.

To achieve (do you mean dream??)**in something is to earn.

I have my heart set on that dream. (What dream)

Something I wish to hear like you. (What does that the mean I do not know). Sometimes I don't want to hear at (I myself sometimes wish I didn't have to see, but than I remember the random skies when the sun sets. I think not hearing is something I would never wish for).

In my world I am a bee, always virbating energy - inside, with few ways to exress out*(side* is not needed)...Good question...

Okay, a little sloppy...

I like this post, because it exhibits an unusual way of thinking.

Keep writting, you're an interesting person.

Answer 4

i thought it was good. It needs to be set up in stanzas tho 8/10!!!! good job keep it up!

Answer 5

it's really good.... i like it :^)