Tell me what you think of my rap.1-10(I extended it)?

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Sittin' here thinking about the murder of Emmett Till/Thinking what a stupid reason to kill/I wonder how Caroline Bryant feels/can't forget about J.W. Milam and Roy Bryant/got me thinking how can people be so violent/can't believe the m o t h e r f*****k e r s got acquitted/for the crime they commited/later on they even admitted/its like the crime was premitted/so god tell me why/Emmetts mother had to say goodbye/its really bugging me like a fruit fly/what I don't understand is how do you murder a 14 year old boy and throw him in the river/a dead body is what his mom is delivered/chourus:Never forget ya,never ever forget ya lets make sure the world never forget ya x2/september 7, 96'/straight out of the Tyson fight/Vegas lights loud and bright/hop into the BMW heading to the club/maybe find some groupies to love/little did the man know sitting at the light come creeping a whited caddilac/not know that they'd attack/no vest no guns that night so no one could fire back/died 7 days later/henice the 7 day theory/12 years later/no conclusion to the murder/so you mean to tell me on a crowded Las Vegas strip/not a single m o t h e rf u c k er left a tip/oh man thats a f*****k i n' trip/so I guess lifes a *****/I can understand people don't want to be looked at as a f*****k i n' snitch/chourus/

So what ya think?I'm thinking about doing another verse for Sean Bell so tell me what ya think.

Answer 1

your awesome 9/10 check mine out