Tell me what you think of these song lyrics that I wrote.?

Question

With you by my side I can do anything,

But when you’re gone my life turns to a mess.

I get these sleepless nights and drowsy days,

If you weren’t in my life I’d fall apart.

I’m missing you; it’s easy to tell,

But all that’s left is one more day.

I need a waste of time,

To get through these lonely hours.

I need a waste of time,

‘Cause minutes seem like days.

Baby without you,

I’m lost and lonely.

Baby without you,

I feel alone in this world.

There’s a few words I keep repeating,

Baby I love you and I’m so sorry.

Please forgive me, life’s just not the same,

My reason for living can’t just walk away.

Baby please tell me you’ll stay,

‘Cause if not I know what I’m going to need;

I need a waste of time,

To get through these lonely hours.

I need a waste of time,

‘Cause minutes seem like days.

Baby without you,

I’m lost and lonely.

Baby without you,

I feel alone in this world.

Answer 1

Flat.. two dimensional letter to Ur baby.. repeating the same sub-picture , but It is a warm letter .. I enjoyed reading it .. He should be more than happy to read it on bed, once , twice , ....! U made Ur point.

Answer 2

ok i know this is not a child song but u need more rhyming...

Answer 3

pretty good, but i would be careful about posting your original work on the net.  Anyone could easily steal it and say they wrote it.  Just trying to help!

Answer 4

i give it 8.1 dont put your song or whatever it is online some people might take it

Answer 5

i would take a song writing class if i were you...

there was no rhythm

Answer 6

STOP WITH THE "BABY"S!!!!

My opinion.