Tell me what you think of this ?

Question

every time i look at him my heart bleeds

i feel he does not notice me

but then he looks up and waves to me

my heart keeps pubbing hard i can't be-leave he look at me

does he like me and can he see me for me

i have no idea i just wait a see

Answer 1

There are a lot of punctuation mistakes.  

Answer 2

Dreadful - poor spelling and punctuation - do something else and give us a break. PLEASE.

(What the h**l is "pubbing" and "be-leave" and "wait a see"??)

Answer 3

My suggestion is to change 'me' as it is repeated too often in the poem, unless it is used for an intended effect.

My version of your poem, sorry couldn't do much lol

everytime i look at him my heart bleeds

i feel like he does not notice me

in a glimpse he looks up and waves at me

my heart keeps thumping harder and harder, and i can't believe he looked at me

does he like me, and can he see me for myself

i have no idea, i'll just wait and see :)

Answer 4

Pretty good, for middle-school gibberish. Do you know where the shift key is located?