Tell me you think of this short poem?

Question

summer is here, bring out the cooler, start drinking some beer, the better the sooner.

Answer 1

I like it, but I highly suggest changing the rhyming in the second and last sections.

The better the sooner, it sounds completely forced and needs to be changed.

Revert it back to 'The sooner the Better'.

It would be easier to change 'bring out the cooler'

Think of using words like

2 syllables:

ator, bettor, debtor, detter, etter, fetter, fretter, geter, getter, jetter, ketter, letter, metter, mettur, netter, petre, petter, retter, schetter, setter, shetter, stetter, sweater, tretter, tschetter, vetere, vetter, wetter, yetter

3 syllables:

air letter, black letter, block letter, chain letter, crank letter, dead letter, form letter, love letter, night letter, pipetter, red setter, short letter, small letter, wage setter

4 syllables:

airmail letter, business letter, english setter, gordon setter, irish setter, market letter, open letter, scarlet letter, to the letter

5 syllables:

investment letter, personal letter, varsity letter

6 syllables:

encyclical letter, polyphonic letter

Answer 2

so you like a cold drink on a hot day then.......the poems ok :!

Answer 3

that's sounds good..

to cheer up somebody lives..would be fit in..

hehe..

Good Luck.. ;)

Answer 4

You are truly Auden reincarnated :-)

Answer 5

LOL

That's great, but I think it would look better as,

"Summer is here, bring out the beer!  The  better the sooner, bring out the cooler!"

It just flows better. ;)

Answer 6

It's short sweet and to the point.

It's summer, so take out some cold beer and lets drink.

It's good.

Answer 7

I'ts short but sweet, I like it.

Answer 8

I'll drink to that !

Answer 9

i agree great for fun card saying,

Answer 10

its more of a jingle rather than a poem so its good in that sense. but, i really dont think it's a poem

Answer 11

Heh...not bad, you can use this in greeting cards:)

Answer 12

" It's Bloody winter, But I'll still have The bear + a Jimmy, because his my mate."  : )