Tell me your honest opinion? good or not?

Question

im in a race and the pace is unbarible,its put a thought of suicide in my soul and its terrible,the sadness in my heart made me start sinking and the sight of death has got me thinking that my insignificant life may not be worth living, what difference could i possibly be making.

All these thoughts have my mind sunken deep in confusion thinking reality is just a dilusion becuase how could death be the final conclusion.

im not special and have not be chosen to be apart of some miricle or crazy revelation im never going to have a premonition so why would i be apart of creation.

please tell me what is the destination than maby the trip would be worth taking.

Answer 1

good if that is the topic you have to do. as long as it pertains to the topic, i like it.

Answer 2

I have to agree with zorkmidus. Needs a little work and yes, watch the spelling. That is very important. Keep working on it and don't give up!

Answer 3

it must be the human race

stay in it lasts a lifetime

Answer 4

Morgan, not good, but there are some thoughts there you can work with.

Some helpful hints: First, work on your spelling.  It's not as trivial as many people think.  Without it, even good work seems terrible.  When you're doing something like this, you also need to think about tempo.  Does it have a good rhythm or does it seem jarring when you read it?  If it doesn't have a good rhythm, rework it until it does.

When it comes to the content, there is far too much self-pity here, and the thoughts don't flow well.  What's the connection between reality being a delusion and death being the final conclusion?  How and why are these two thoughts related?

The same with the lines, "I'm never going to have a premonition so why would I be a part of creation?"  There are countless reasons for being here, and you haven't even given a good reason for NOT being here.

Lastly, you may have heard this before, but think it over: the destination isn't important.  The journey is.

Answer 5

that's how i feel sometimes, but then i think of all my friends and family that will miss me when I'm gone.  and so i bring myself up, and continue the race that seems to never end