Tellme what what you think of my poem? its for my ex(i aint goin to show her though)?

Question

i feel horrible for everything, i brought all of this to myself.

instead of loving you the right way, i took it for granted.

you dont understand how far i would go to let you know

no matter the weather conditions, whether its sun, rain or snow

i would do anything to see and look into your eyes

and i tell you that you will always have a place where my heart resides

i know you gave me a chance and i failed to seize

but never again would i ever let go of thee

i promise to you that i will fulfill everyone of your dreams

from the range rover to building the house of your dreams

I just want to let you know this is the new me

the man you want and need is what i will be.

Answer 1

dang, thats deep

Answer 2

good job check mine out too. its a love poem

Answer 3

Very deep indeed.A great poem,perhaps you should give it to her and she may think twice

Answer 4

It was ok.  The first 4 lines aren't good at all.  The ending was fantastic.  Also try not to repeat dreams twice and the end of the sentence.

Answer 5

That's awesome, Such a wonderful way to show your love and pain. Good luck my frnd, your love is going to be with you for always. :o)

Answer 6

well gee your name is already on here and you dont think she will see this. i think this is a setup to see if she will read this. and if not dont let her catch you with your guard down like this, she may want to take advantage of this. I would.

Answer 7

That is so beautiful and touchin.... if u really love her and want her back YOU DEF should give it to her....u never know

Answer 8

that is so sweet, u shuld show her, ur awesome at riting!!!

Answer 9

Omg, that was so beautiful. You really should show that to her, it seems like you put a lot of heart into it.

Answer 10

I would write a personal letter to your ex and expose all of the things you feel which made you a **** or that you regret.

Poetry should be about the person and how you see them- not a bio of a broken relationship- why would they want to relive that?

Answer 11

Its great you should really show her

Answer 12

if you still love her this much why not show it to her? let her know that you are still there for her and maybe things will work out, other than that, this poem is lovely

Answer 13

Somebody's whipped.

I mean, um, how sweet.

Answer 14

awww thats amazing....!