The Secret......poetry challenge/exercise. Care to comment?

Question

Once upon a time in 1992 I was vaccuming and became weary of the exercise ("man vaccuming sux") so I stopped and decided to write down the next poetic idea that came to mind and this was the result, uneditted (except for grammar indicators) from the original in 1992: (in later times I have entitled it The Secret)

And under the endless bank of stars,

beneath the stretching rows of glory,

remains the Secret wide and deep,

a hidden silence in its story.

Subdued in time and motion vast,

never again to show its face,

banished beyond mere mortals touch,

revealing nevermore its perfect grace.

The Innocence, birthed and then reborn,

a sacred seed that blooms in time,

no sooner reaped and then is scattered,

true mystery shows in love sublime

Has anyone else tried this type of exercise and if so what was the result for you?

Answer 1

It's the only way I ever write poetry, I  write what comes and it usually works out much better than when I sit down with the intention of writing.

Answer 2

Ya. I've done that waaaaaay too often. usually while doing a test at school though :).

Yours is soooooooooooo good. It's funny thinking I wasn't even born when you wrote it.

Answer 3

And a one and a two

Lawrence, you still there?

Bubbling your way you are

waltzing for another now

do they serve Everclear?

There, that is my one second in time seed that escaped my mine!  Now excuse me, I must go back to vacuuming!

Edit:  You don't want me to vacuum?  Send me a note for my wife!  Strausburg (berg?) ND was the birthplace of Lawrence Welk.  It was also the largest consumer of this 180 proof alcohol per capita in ND back then!  He was pickled even before he began making tiny bubbles!

Answer 4

Unfortunately, most of the ideas for my poems come to me in the middle of the night. The only thing I can do while vacuuming is cough and express unprintable epithets. Oh yes, the poem...vacuum more; it brings out the best in you.

Answer 5

I have done this as well.

Answer 6

I think this is very good!

Being that I clean houses for a living I do an awful lot of vacuuming, so your idea isn't far off base for me!

Usually that's how poems come to me too...