The Truth of Love --- Your feedback is greatly appreciated!!?

Question

The Truth of Love

I love the idea

Of love.

I love the idea

Of knowing

That someone special will

Always be there.

I love the idea

Of wrapping

My arms around her body,

Looking in her eyes, and knowing

That everything will always be alright

Because we have each other.

I love the idea

Of a truly passionate kiss,

One that makes time stop,

And your heart speed up.

I love the idea

Of waking up

In the morning with

Her

In my arms,

And starting off the day with seeing

Her face, peacefully asleep.

I love the idea

Of having

Someone who I can show my inner self to,

An individual who knows

That my very existence

Is only to make them smile.

I love the idea

Of somebody

Who can see

Me

For who I really am, not who I

Appear to be, and

Love that me.

I love the idea

Of always

And forever.

I love the idea

Of inside jokes and phrases

That only we can understand.

Answer 1

It was a little bit too long, and I think you should be a bit more creative with your 'ideas'.  Try much harder.  For example, I'd rather have had you say, 'i love going to the zoo and looking at the flamingos with you' than 'i love holding you tight.'  Those kinds of phrases are only used by songwriters because tight rhymes with right and love rhymes with above... you see the connections.  (not saying that you should make your poem extremely wierd, just more unique)

:D Still, I absolutely adored your last lines and thus your amazing concept... it was very powerful.

Answer 2

WOW, that was amazing, i could really feel it, but the phrase "Looking in her eyes, and knowing

That everything will always be alright " is from a jonas brothers song. Well anyway i loved it!! Could you please comment on mine too?

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Answer 3

Oh my goodness! I really understand what you mean, I've gone through the same thing so many times before......The poem really reflects your soul and inner purpose, and if this was meant for someone special...boy, they'll end up in tears...

Answer 4

I love the idea

Of you putting more of your poems up...

You simply have to write more!

You don't have a choice =]

I was very moved....

Answer 5

Aw! I love it! I like the part: "I love the idea of always and forever." You write really good : )

Answer 6

i like it.

ill give a thumbs up + a star.