The dope show poem . . . ?

Question

pills for this

& pills for that

dope to prevent stress

& dope to prevent fat.

you're all drugged up

& completely shut out

don't tell me to shut up

i know what i'm talking about.

you're over medicated,

over & over & over again

sober up & get educated

you don't need that many pills

for such little pain

Answer 1

I wouldn't call it 'The Dope Show' because that's the title of a Marilyn Manson song, some people might think you're trying to copy that.

I like it, especially the last 2 lines, they pack a punch so to speak :) the message is good, I think if you just looked over it and maybe made some of the lines a bit shorter so it flowed better, it would be amazing! Right now, I'll give it 6/10, but with some tiny adjustments it could easily become a 9 or 10 :)

Answer 2

i would calll it...."Under the Pills"

Answer 3

this i like.  

take away dope show as a title though - it's not original.

Answer 4

I like the poem, & it seems to be true for so many today.

Thanks.

Answer 5

its a little fruity..like fruitier than Froot Loops, Fruity Pebbles and Richard Simmons put together and wrapped with a rainbow ribbon...while "what what in my butt" plays