The poem tittle is "Simple" tell me what u think?

Question

I love you, I need you, I miss you

That's what you've always says.

To prevent me from running away

After all the things you've done to me

I just can't figure out the reason why

I still love you the same

I'm so sicking of waiting

Every night for you to come home

Enough of crying

From all the Pain you had caused

Over of hating

The women who you says are just friends

No longer can I handle your way of loving

All I wanted was your love and warmth.

But what I got was your cold shoulders and lies

I've endure this pain for so many days

Sorry I made a mistake was all you had to say...

Was my wish that simple enough to make you lost your way?

Answer 1

Please don't take offense. I felt your soul and the lyrics were expressive, but there were quite a  few grammatical errors.

Answer 2

SIMPLE would go like this

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a short way to say what words really are for

how can this be simple if there are many more

words not simple quite explanitory

and an amusing little story

Answer 3

Grammatical errors aren't necessarily an issue as poems aren't meant to be all about perfect, correct English, it's about expressing yourself using a variety of styles of language, and quite frankly, what ever suits you best. It's a personal thing.

However, no offense intended, as I feel the skill is there, but I felt it was quite generic, much like a pop song you'd here on the radio, not particularly unique.