The wonders of Poetry...Do you like it?

Question

It's a sonnet I wrote back during school. Not exactly a sonnet because theres a line I messed up...but it's a sonnet none the less...=3

Sonnet of Immortality

In a weak moment, I may consider it

While I immortalize you with these words

And as long as these days are lit

With no compromise from the lords

We can all see the sun search and find

Behind dark brown eyes of reality

Behind the eyes of the lonely mind

That gives us the holy grail to find immortality

Yet, these words mean nothing to you

You and those few words you have to spare

Since there's nothing but a sky that is blue

And a sun that shines on your back that is bare

So we'll wait for these words that will bleed you dry

For as long as we worship the sky

Answer 1

This is really good!

I hope you got an A on it :)