Then, what think you of "Nepal'?

Question

Sandstone talons etched your name, tested your ripeness,

Signaled to eagle-high ledges...

A foot rose, fell, and your soul was at one with the peak.

You became one with the mountain...

Did it become one with you...

Did you both journey higher, lower, or to the side.

Hard to hide a mountain, easy to cover a soul,

Until Eternity's dust settles...

Other mountains, other souls, waiting within the air.

Did you seek, along the path, a higher point...

Did it seek one further along the journey...shadows

Cast by the light.

Hard to move a mountain, easy to swallow a soul.

Can one swallow the mountain

Without moving the soul.

Joy. Resolve.

Celebration silence

Merging to dawn waves

Answering twilight questions.

Answer 1

I especially enjoyed the second stanza. Your break into poetic license and breakaway from conventional grammar was refreshing without being encumbering. You break narration in the second stanza and the 2nd person "you" is just gone like you turned away from them and they simply stop being important.

You need to punctuate the questions in the first and second stanza and break the lines cleaner. I felt that some of the lines lacked enough content or meter to stand by themselves. I really hope you bring "you" back in the second stanza, if only in the last few lines, to thread the piece completely and give us a hint as to the importance of "you" and to draw together the meaning and motif of the poem.

Kudos. Your voice is almost like my poetry professor's.  

Answer 2

i like it. reminds me of times when i was young (:

Answer 3

I don't know what to say to this. Very thought provoking and beautiful.

Answer 4

Beautiful.

Answer 5

The mountain as metaphor for the spiritual climb. The insoluble questions asked throughout the night. The water, which at dawn always seems to answer my own questions.

The soul cannot be swallowed; the spirit prevails.

EDIT: The Mars ship will do a pickup in Papua.

Answer 6

This is very deep. Each time I read this over, I scratched a little more of the surface.

There is an ancient Chinese saying that says,"each time a dove flaps her wings, the sound can be heard for miles and miles."

This means there are residual effects for everything we do.

I liked the way you asked, "Did it or Did you....." This indicates that no one was there. It's something that only us, as individuals, can decide. Whether or not we will give up our souls.

The two last lines embraced how much of a challenge we all must face, knowing the moon controls the tide and from that view point, we are only a spec of sand.

Answer 7

I know that is all done in metaphore it took me several times reading it before the shadow transformed into  light !  As the eagle sours to find out what kind of soul he has if it can actually move mountains, or would he fly away and retreat! Well there you go not sure I have got it all right! The part you are saying you came one with the mountain or the mountain came one with you! told me this was a contest of somekind if the eagle soul could stand up to the test!  Let me know if I am close!  Thanks and Cheers!

This was deep for me, and that spell check not working again sorry for any spell errors!

Answer 8

Excuse me ladies...Mountains...Lifting.....Souls..... Man, EP, this telepathy thing is getting strange.

Papua New Guinea...On board ship...enviro study...1st cup...+ 14 hours..

And I started excavating my heads and came up with points...souls ...

lifting ...mountains....

Here in bizzzaro land anything is possible. I believe that the Martian flight schedule should set a stop here.