This is a different sorta of poem I just wrote. What do you think?

Question

idk if anyone else has ever written a poem like this... but, its about, like. ok, well, read it first, if you have any questions, id be happy to answer them =)

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Do my lines really need to be longer?

When my goal is simply to make you stronger

In the end, will it have mattered

If my words were a bit scattered

My ideas may be diverse

But they’d never make you worse

Why can’t you see I’m doing my best

To make sure you will come out blessed?

The words aren’t the point

They don’t really matter

It’s the meaning behind them

That can build up or shatter

I’m trying so hard

To pull down my guard

Or share a dream

To the extreme

To bless a soul

Just another goal

I want it to be

Special, you see

Worthwhile your time

Reading my rhyme

That could possibly succeed

Or change a heart, indeed

Answer 1

i don't know about the rap thing.. but i agree with you.. it's not really the words, the length of the lines or even the ryhme that matters. just the message being transmitted..

well, i love it when people criticise my poems though (i've only ever made two =p) because it tells me how i can make it better.. it doesn't matter that someone told you to use longer lines.. you can decide for yourself whether to accept the advice or not.. because when it comes right down to it, you're the one expressing yourself, your thoughts and emotions.

for myself, i really like this poem but i like a lot of things so don't take my word for it.. lol...

Answer 2

A nicely written thought.More clarity is required.

Answer 3

Just a selection of words in rhyme, they are meaningless, read the works of the great poets and compare,

Answer 4

I liked it . Great

Answer 5

That's amazing. Rate mine? http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?...

Answer 6

i was feeling this. i like the strength behind your words. good ****.

Answer 7

I think that this is good, but I don't really like rap. I'm into longer lines with more words myself, but I think it is really good. I can't critique though, I don't know how rap works ^^

Answer 8

I LOVE IT!

Answer 9

its pretty cool; its meaningless but cool especially the rhyming not 2 easy 2 master that