This is a love poem I wrote for mi amor Dec 07. Tell me what you think?! pleae dont steal Thanx :O)?

Question

Confession

If love is like the ocean

My heart is the Red Sea

Your soul is like the River Nile

That flows right into me

I loose myself within your kiss

Your spell, it pulls me in

And when you gaze into my eyes.....I find I'm lost again

Your voice, Your touch - The heat, The rush

..That takes my breath away

It's more than lust

True love, True trust

Is what makes me feel this way

You are all that I will ever need

A rareity among men

If angels walk amongst the Earth

You must be heaven sent

My love for you will never change

Though trails will come, and go

I am yours forever

...Just wanted you to know

Written by J.L.V. Copyright 2008

Answer 1

It's a well thought out poem.  You've avoided the traditional syrup and expressed some interestingly creative phrases that are particularly fascinating ............

my love for you will never change

though trails will come, and go

I am yours forever

....just wanted you to know.

and I also love your second stanza as well....

I lose myself wthin your kiss

Your spell, it pulls me in

and when you gaze into my eyes

....I find I'm lost again.

Very nicely phrasing and the flow is just beautiful and ties it altogether perfectly.  Well done!!

Answer 2

its awesome!,

Answer 3

great! amazing! you rock!

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Answer 4

hmm, a nice  romatic little poem.  People still believe in a love like that, it is hard to believe, but if you have found it, make sure you keep it safe and pray to whoever was thoughtful enough to think of you for this gift.