This is a more finished version of a peom I posted a while ago?

Question

Witches chanting,

dwelling on the pain their granting.

hummed words cross their lips,

sacrificial knives upon their hips.

offered girl dressed in white,

her neck will bleed tonight.

shaman praying,

not knowing the words he's saying.

mumbled words begin to start

to save virgins virtued heart.

sacred girl beneith moon light,

shall her life be saved to night.

witches panting

slowing their chant to a quiet ranting

knives come down, cross the neck

to spill ones blood on alters deck

offered girl chained to tight

her tears now her only way to fight

shaman sounding

rightuals as staff on ground is pounding

blurred words come to form

striking stones to start a fire storm

offered girl filled with fright,

her life shall be saved to night

Answer 1

I think thats good just make some spelling corrections. Like the last sentence the last word should be tonight but yeah its really good. QUESTION- if they slit her thoat how did she survive???? It was like a story or movie to me , it drew me in and I was wondering if thats how youd intended it to be and how this happened.

Answer 2

im not into petry but that was pretty good....

Answer 3

Really cool  l love it. In the way it is wrtiten it is a superb creative peice

Answer 4

I realy didnt want to read it all so Im gona say good job