This is a poem that i wrote when my life started to go on the rocks please tell me what you think of it.?

Question

as i looked out the window smelling the roses of happyness that could not be mine.

i fell asleep dreaming of a world that happyness wasn't entwind

but as i woke and the real world took its grasp

i thought of happyness that would always always last

Answer 1

It's a nice start, let the saga continue!!!

Answer 2

that sucked balls!!!!!! nobody in their right mind would like that  retarded poem

Answer 3

i like it but it would be nice a little longer

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