This is a random poem I wrote, what do you think?

Question

Without You

Everyday is full of Shattered Dreams

Everything is not what it seems

I can’t wait for the day these painful tears will go away

There is nothing worth a smile

No-one to make my life worthwhile.

It wasn’t so long ago that I was another person

You made me see who I can be

I was lost in a world of confusion.

Waiting and Dreaming for you to come and rescue me

You can always hear my silent voice

And I know that you’ll hold my hand when I am weak.

I want to wake up with you by my side

I have nothing left to hide

There are no more tears.

When I think of you everything just disappears.

It’s what you do for me, I can’t understand

Your always there

You always care.

Your always so strong

With you, I feel I belong.

Answer 1

it shows deep emotions. who ever it is written for will really understand how you feel.

Answer 2

That is REALLY good.  You are born to be a poet.

Answer 3

polish and rewrites are orders in the day

day time boring but then the reward flows

flows the time forward but we seek an end

end this I must before I rust

Rust not, and rest not thy journey onward....

as a poet I too write and soul touches soul  - keep at it.

Answer 4

I dont believe their is an absolute answer, but I say heck ya.  a good poem and not so deep it hides the meaning

Answer 5

that would be a good song. maybe try to put it to some music and if you or a friend are good at singing have a go at it.

but as for a regular poem; it is good. it has good meaning and definitely came from your heart.

well done. !

Answer 6

The poem is fine, but if you want to write you really need to know the correct definition of words like "random".