This is my last poem that im writing you guys and pllleeeaasssee dont steal any of my poems pllleeeaaassee

Question

this ones a true one cause this one happened to me last year and its called"When I saw you"

When I saw you staring at me,.I thought everything was alright.But i guess i was wrong .Some fool i was for liking you.I really thought you liked me the same way that i liked you.I cant believe that you did this to me.When I saw you I thought I was gonna spend my life with you.Why cant you see all the brightness inside of me.As you can see im doing fine with out you.But when I saw youI thought everything was alright .But i was wrong .I really thought when i saw you i thought my life was changed .But now I cant believe that you would love someone else better than me.But cant you see that im very prettier than her.I cant believe that you talked about me the whole time.And now cant you see im making my dream,and cant you you also see that im making more money than you.And when i saw you I thought everything was alright.The end

Answer 1

The poem is very good, if you could break it down a little to make it easier on the eyes and help the reader go along with you on a roller-coaster ride it would be even better.

As for the subject matter what can I say, it seems somehow men and women have a way of messing it up for each other.

Best Wishes

Answer 2

put a (c) and your name and date with your work and you will be somewhat protected

don't let anyone tell you your poetry/lyrics are not good- it's the feeling that does the work justice,ahd that you definately have

Answer 3

...I don't think you have to worry about anyone stealing this...

Answer 4

it was alright...

but i think it would be best if u deleted this question and didnt write the poem in paragraph form.

break it up, line for line...couplets or whatever u want.

its kinda hard to read.