This is one of my first poems, could you please tell me what you think?

Question

Voice?

Where have you gone?

Don't leave my head empty!

I want you my insanity...

you complete me

Now I have taken my pills

I've lost you my old friend

I've been forced

to think

to feel

agian

I don't like it,

Insanity,

my old friend.

Come back to me!

love me the

way

you use to...

Do you remeber how you

won me over?

It was your voice

you woke me

in the night

I was stressed

but you

told me it would

be alright.

Such happy times

my love

Please come back to me...

Answer 1

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Answer 2

i love it!

what do you think of this?

my dode showed

in the morning dew

as i launched my pellet

to infinity.

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Answer 3

it is pretty good for your first poam

Answer 4

It is really good. Did you write this because of the way YOU feel?

Answer 5

Pretty good. Stayed on topic throughout and it was also a little intense.

8/10.

I'm not the best at rating poems though. More into lyrics lol.

Answer 6

I like it. I interpret it as our insanity is our normalcy. The pills are our conformity, and the voice is our integrity. Dig deeper......way deeper. Let it make you cry! Let it make you laugh uncontrolably! It should p**s you off, and make you appreciate what you have at the same time. The poem is fine.........but i wanna know who you are when all is said and done.

Answer 7

iam thinking that you had a loss in a realtion ship? it was a wonderful poem i think you should keep up the good work! you know love is a wonderful thing =)

Answer 8

usually i tell people theyre ok poems(i write to) but this is really thought-provoking, i really like it!!!

Answer 9

it was entertaining, honest and refreshing, i just love this third person kind of style you have placed into it.nice one.