This poem came to me in my sleep is it good

Question

OK this just came to me while i was half a sleep thinking of my boyfriend

From the day i met you i knew you were special

and hoped that one day you would be mine

you had to be

For years i couldn't think straight

you blocked all my thoughts

you were always on my mind

Every day i longed to hold you

stoke your dark brown hair

whisper sweet words in you're ear and

kiss your tender lips

Its been a year since it happened

a year to the day

you said to me the words that i

said to you so many times in my dreams

is it any good

Answer 1

its ok  

Answer 2

I think it could be more of a song than a poem.

Answer 3

i dunno i don't really like it.

it could be because it just came to you when you were half concious, but it just sounds like you were thinking inside the box.

do you actually want to make something of this poem? make it more interesting. it's boring. get creative and think OUTSIDE the box. ever heard of similies, metaphors, personification, alliteration??? that helps.

it's extremely boring to read a choppy poem about someone's dumb love life.

Answer 4

Shows a lot of promise.  Try reworking the last four lines for a better flow.

Answer 5

it doesn't need to rhyme

but i love it its sooooo good =]

Answer 6

it does not rhyme, but everything else is really "awww"

Answer 7

it doesn't rhyme, but its really deep and it sounds like it came from your heart.

if you give it to your boyfriend, I'm sure he'll love it!