This poem grew long hair and a beard, trying to look like Walt Whitman, I suppose. What do you think?

Question

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WAY OUT WEST

WHERE THE HOT SUN

BAKES THE FLESH

In the air,

in the very oxygen I breathe,

there is a presence,

a sense,

as though I’m being regarded…judged.

Not a Godly stare,

or ancient awareness.

…I look back to see my father,

or Great-great-great Grandmother,

seeing me as their clan cogent,

their diluted spirit docent,

I feel the hands outreaching,

in the words and songs worth teaching

And I reach for things they’re preaching

Sans sorrow and beseeching…

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Answer 1

I like it.

Answer 2

"Hi!",

That was touching. Great poem once again.

Cheers : )

Answer 3

After they read this poem, they will all be nodding in approval.

Answer 4

I ignore my relatives in relation to their relativity to things deep

it hurts don't go there they all try to get into my head I said yeah! yeah! yeah!

Are you ignoring this one?

http://uk.answers.yahoo.com/question/ind...

He's attention seeking again.

Me too why don't you answer my fings no-more?? eh?

Answer 5

it is VERY good, i could truly call it a "walt whitman", amazing work =)

Answer 6

You set the mood of your poem, with eyes that saw your parched hot skin in the desert with the spirit of family reaching out to you!

Very nice!! Cheers !!!

Answer 7

Yay! I learned a new word. Docent...I will look it up once I have finished my answer. This strikes me in particularly poignant manner, as I see not only the words, but the style in which they are writte. You, TD, are a constant inspiration, constantly jumping around in forms and styles, making them each singularly your own. If you have a manual on how this is done, please send me the information on where I can get mine.

Answer 8

This is the first time I have seen your work and it has a power that is unusual to see on this site. I could almost feel the subliminal heat buzz and squint inducung light from your poem. Thank you for sharing.

Answer 9

It's always amazing what random chance can do with a really good gene pool.  And you, dear sir, are from the deepest end of yours.

Answer 10

you seem to be a carrier of ancient wording, and i like how you say them, albit worrisome in a way..but again, we should be concerned. ..as always.

man, my donut was good today. :)

Answer 11

Trying to uphold your end of the bargain?  The seed passes through us and gives us pause.  You covered the feelings well.  The title?

Answer 12

I do not like it.

0-5 sorrys.