This poem is called Damnation, tell me what you think?

Question

It feels as though I walk a path

that knows only chaos and damnation

filled with anxiety

covered in darkness

showing no signs of light

No rest as I tremble forth

deeper in to a place that has

been forsaken by so many before

Battling with demons that

don’t exist

facing fears with

confusion as to why

my life has turned to this

With a broken hart knowing

only lies and deception

filling up these eyes in

pain and hatred

blinding me to the path

of true happiness

Answer 1

maybe it should start like this:

It feels as though I walk

a path that knows

only chaos and damnation

filled with anxiety

covered in darkness

showing no signs of light

think over the construction, the appearance, you can achieve better results by rereading out loud several times.

you can leave it, it s good this way, feelings are well expressed, and don't feel damned, it is only a period of inspiration, which is parfois very good to have:)

Answer 2

I think it is really good. It shows how you are feeling.