This poem it titled My Wish plz let me know what you think of it

Question

Life for me has been a jungle

Wherever I go people mumble

Sometimes I feel like screaming out

To punch, kick and lash out

But in the end how will that help me?

Life for me is now turning around

I can finally put my feet on the ground,

A miracle cure you might suggest,

My emotions repressed?

No! I say its not my mind, Its me I’m free.

Its all thanks to him the one I love

He makes me feel like a dove

I can spread my wings and fly away

But I don’t I decide to stay

One day I will tell him how I feel.

The only thing I wish now is this

That I will be forever his

Safe and secure in his warm arms

Protected from anything that wants to harm

So now all I ask my love is this

Please help me too keep my wish . . .

Answer 1

yes its nice,short and sweet.well at least someone is rustling your feathers,we all need to feel loved and protected,i agree its a jungle out there,at least you know if things don't work out,you still have your wings,remember to keep them flapping,you might need them one day,your wish is your command,you tell him,peAce.

Answer 2

Angel, U made Ur point loud and clear.U followed a poetic line.U have tried to force the rhyme, which made some lines long and shook their balance ( rhythm).Except for the dove, which U elaborated, and the miracle which U haven't described, the picture lacked elements, and in general it was innocently plain one color  2-d picture. U need to do some reading, but Ur talent is there. keep on writing and good luck.