This poem was written in 5 minutes. What do you think?

Question

No editing of any kind. Originally posted on Yahoo answers under my alias. Now posted under my real name.

There's nothing.

And nothing can be a great thing.

Or possibly,

it always is a great thing

and

there is never a semblance of doubt

as to it's greatness.

It's felt in the air

At 2 a.m.

bar closing time

in the lines of fast food lanes

where the workers

wish for a little more meaning

just a little more

than serving drunk college *****

It's a beautiful thing

To watch roses grow at midnight

to become nothing

in a little while

It's just the way it is

And

Some can't see the beauty

In the misery

but

Others can

Those are the true gods among men

They see the end

Not as a beginning

but as

Nothing

And Nothing is beautiful

Answer 1

that is a great poem

Answer 2

Sounds like your high. But I kinda like the "Nothing" thing you got going on here. Keep it up, you show great potential.

When it hits me to write, I get to it, no matter what time of night it is. The good ones come out fast.

Answer 3

Your nothing is too negative.  Go into the nothing and you will see something which is creative, alive and vivid.

Answer 4

If nothing is a great and beautiful thing...then this is the greatest, most beautiful piece of nothing I've ever read.

Really. Let's try to write a poem that means something...

Answer 5

wierd,,,don't get it

Answer 6

I love poetry and this is really good.  The last verse is my favorite. Good job.

Answer 7

that was great lol.

i also make and post poems i make under-five minutes lol..

i just get inspired easily :D

but hey keep up the good work.

Answer 8

If you didn't dedicate a decent amount of time to create this poem, how can you expect me to spend more time critiquing than you did writing??

Answer 9

unusual structure, but I have to say I really did like this poem. As someone of whom nothing is everything, I relate to it well

great Job

Edit: I run a poetry website; http://www.poetrybysilvertongue.com/

I would like to publish this poem to my "Guest Poetry" page, where you will be given full copyright and credit for the poem.

you do not have e-mail so please e-mail me if you would like your poem to be added to those already on the page.

Answer 10

Very moving, and very nicely written. Great job!

Answer 11

In 5 minutes, your awesome!