Thoughts On My Poem? "Keys"?

Question

I wrote this poem & would love some feedback on it, thank you in advance.

[ Keys ]

You are like a piano,

So beautiful at the touch of a key.

You are all the keys that play together,

As my stunning symphony.

And I am like your piano,

As you touch every one of my keys.

When we begin to play together,

I am as beautiful as you want me to be.

Answer 1

It's a very beautiful poem, you should get it published.

It sound like... but I'm guessing that's what you ment.

Don't Let your talent go to waste do something about it.

Awww Now iAll Of A Suddenly Feel Calm,  x

Answer 2

sorry i cant type a f**t sound

Answer 3

Alaska, I can feel your tone and sensitivity through the verse. The verse, however, doesn't manifest the full intensity of such tone and sensitivity. It is very direct e.g "You are like a piano", "And I am like your piano". Also its repetitive (redundant); the words: piano, key, play, touch, together, and beautiful are each repeated twice. That is a lot in comparison w/ the size of the verse. I'm not saying the verse is bad, but you as a person with such intimacy with music, could 'v made it better.I like especially the last line, and I really want you to be as beautiful as you can be; and read more of your (poems).  

Answer 4

That's extremely touching... I loved it. As beautiful as you want me to be... that's a fantastic metaphor...

Thank you for this, it was beautiful... it's true!