Thoughts on my poem?

Question

my apology to the world

in frank and practiced terms

torn apart and cast aside

like flesh beneath the worms

for all the pills ingested

all the wasted days

for thoughts of euthanasia

my self degrading ways

sorry for the sadness

the sulking and the sin

just my way of dealing

with the h**l that I am in

lastly for my living

that I am still around

sorry that a hero

hasnt put me in the ground

Answer 1

you're a great writer! it's a bit on the dark side, but hey... everybody has days like that.

Answer 2

Obviously, it's really dark.  Poetry is great for releasing negative emotions and expressing yourself.  It's a decent poem, in my opinion.

Answer 3

Obviously, like others said, it's very dark, but I totally understand. And I like how you can write a dark poem without it being almost-- cheesy. Most poem that, at least kids my age, write that are dark come across to me as just trying to get attention, although I totally feel for them because I've felt like it too before, it still seems so... yeah. But you're poem had a nice honesty and wonder and just, I liked it. I liked it a lot. You have great talent.

Answer 4

I feel your angst.  

Answer 5

I love it.  It's honest and not condescending.  How did you come up with "practiced terms"?  

Isn't it sick that from pain can come such wonder!!!!

Answer 6

That is really heavy. It has a wonderful flow, and gives a good image.

Reminds me a bit of Pink Floyd.. And the worms ate into his brain.

Answer 7

That's super depressing but still well written