Thoughts on this? Is it good, bad, alright, terrible?

Question

Soul of a Shadow -

Silence surrounds the empty sky

Sun’s warmth; dawn breaks the grey

Shadows’ dance and dreams sigh

Morning’s light chases the day.

An empty soul sits alone

Lost in semblance of a past

Weeping in memories sown

The hand of fate cast.

Darkness presses the days light

Twisted shadows; sun turns to shade

Dreams lost to a sinister night

Hope’s faith ended on a blade.

A wish; lost in the moon’s pale glow

Moments spent in silent thought

What a heart willed to bestow

Intentions turned to be all naught.

Memories of you still wash ashore

Tears spilled from moments gone

Regrets left to keep the score

Shadowed by another rising dawn.

Honest opinions please :)

Answer 1

its....well....generic. too many people write poems on pain and suffering. its better than some of the other people that i have read. but next time, pick a happy or nutral topic. and focus it on somthing specific. you could write about a big decition, a moment in everyones life (i.e. birth/death) I don't like sad poems, even though everyone wants to be a "sad depressed poet" i don't think its a good thing to be.

GOOD LUCK

Answer 2

I like it a lot. Good job :)

Answer 3

K - I love it, I feel exactly what you are trying to convey!!!

Always,

Amie

Answer 4

i think its trying a bit too hard

Answer 5

not bad. good vocab. a little hard to interpret

Answer 6

I think you are very said and lonely you sound so desparate. take all this great talent and put it to the oposite like about connection and light and sunshine......