Three Heartbreak poems, what do you think?

Question

So recently I've been having some guy issues...they just turn into different people halfway into the relationship it's like they act nice and sweet at first then when they have me hooked they turn into completely different people....and im just tired of getting hurt all the time....

Here's three poems I wrote in a matter of minutes within the last couple days because of how I've been feeling. Tell me what you think of them please. Names for the poems would help as well.

How can one person have such an effect on me.

Can he truly see what's inside, does he see?

Inside I'm screaming out, "don't get too close."

He can hurt me bad, more than most

My mind is clouded with confusion with doubt.

I could scream, I could yell, or I can shout.

No matter what I do it will not make up for the pain.

The pain within me that has gracefully left a stain.

Hard to breath, sick to my stomach, shaking hands.

Deep in my stomach up to my pituitary glands.

Tears at night develop within my eyes.

During the day I hide them, to cover the lies.

While inside my heart is being eaten alive.

To find happiness this I strive.

It's as if I hurt to love or love to hurt.

Constantly making my life feel like dirt.

In time I know and realize I will heal.

That what I am feeling will someday not be real.

There's so much I cannot hide

This pain and suffering I cannot bide

Does he not see that I feel

That what is inside of my heart is real

Feeling like a soft jagged blade is slicing gently against my smooth fragile skin

I feel it do I care? Only that you're the one hurting me. Do you think you'll win?

Wanting to cry

While inside I die

Your laugh, that smile

Wishing you'd stay a while.

I used to think I was special

Now I know that I am not

I think about you all the time

I wish I didn't think of you a lot

I cannot seem to get you off my mind

Though at times it seems you're gone

You pop back into my heart

To your eyes and lips I am drawn.

I write how I feel....and how I feel is pain. Someday this will be a thing of the past I hope.

Answer 1

good

Answer 2

In my humble opinion as a teacher, I think your poems are fantastic......What happened to you though?  Last night you gave me such great advice but you are wrapped up with a jerk??? Believe me, I know exactly what you mean about starting off sweet and nice and turning.  I call it EMOTIONAL IMMATURITY, those 'boys' are simply not ready for the adult responsibilities of a relationship so start acting out in those silly ways until you get fed up and leave, making it easier for them......Sigh....Deep breath.....I wish you well.

Answer 3

those are all awesome...it made me sad

check out Tokio Hotel...they might have good songs for you...

like "Love is Dead" and "Sacred"

Answer 4

thats so beautiful, i really like it!

Answer 5

I am sorry that you have been getting hurt. I have seen that happen beofre where they act nice and then they turn different once they know that you want to be with them. Well let me tell you that if they are acting like that you dont want them anyway. You deserve better then that. Alot of men these days seem to get the notion that you only need to care for her until you actually get into the relationship. and I am speaking in third person when I say that. Because I use to be like that in my younger years. But Over the past few years I have changed the way I act and contribute to the relationship. I can tell that your poems really do come from your heart. It may sound cliche' but trust me one day that perfect someone will come along and sweep you off your feet. Hope this helps.

Aww,your welcome and if you need a friend or someone to talk to or listen, just email me.

Answer 6

They are all very good. I know another type of heartbreak, when you want somebody you could of had, but you lost your chance and now its too late. It will come, but when it does, hold on to it, don't let another one of the jerks who hurt you before ruin your actual love, because it could be too late. Keep looking :)