Title and suggestions please........?

Question

Standing at the road side

of a busy town

I ponder

Where all these people are heading.

I see a lawyer

driven by his thoughts

to outwit his rival

with stunning evidences

brought from the depth of falsity.

I see an officer

headed by his thoughts

to mount his under table fortune

with quick and prompt service

brought from the depth of selfishness

I see a leader

led by his thoughts

to trick his folks

with touching rhetoric

brought from the depth of hypocrisy

For humanity, I see,

is a distance away from them

cast under the darkness of malice

engulfing everyone around.

Standing at the side

of a crowded park

I notice

These other people who are staggering (shuffling???)

There goes an old man thinking

how to please his grandson

with a glimmering toy

brought from the depth of selfless love

There goes a farmer thinking

how to swell his fruits and crops

with hard work and devotion

brought from the depth of ...?...

There goes a child thinking

. . .

Answer 1

The perfect fit to me would be to pladgerize a bit from a piece I did once. "Standing still inside a day and watching as the world goes by." It's long but describes it and since this was never registered to me though it is mine, you are welcome to it.

Answer 2

name it "Standing..."

try combining the six and seven stanzas. but get rid of the staggerring/shuffling.

Standing at the side of a crowded park I notice an old man thinking

Can this toy please his grandson given with the gift of love

... the biggest problem is you are being too descriptive or verbose. see the difference what compacting the way I did leaves a different but better impression of how the grandfather may be feeling. try it with the verses and see what happens to the flow.

maybe the the title should be "Standing to See".

good luck.