Tweaked, titled, and reposted...your thoughts please?

Question

---Breaking Cycle---

Softly luring

Sweet temptation

Fiery temptation

Calls again, again...

Again...

Charm and beauty

Flame-dance beauty

Everlast in memory

Everlast in dream

Edited remembrance

Edited in sleep

Forgets the burn, not the light

Mistake made is a lesson taught

To not learn is a folly

A fool repeats, again, again...

Again...

Again...

And cease.

Answer 1

Quite a chore to read.

First of all, it looks like a list, either grocery or registration. And the repetition of words such as temptation and everlast, so cliche and sets fire to the corpse that this so-called poem is.

Answer 2

not so good...sorry

Answer 3

As long as it means something to you to me it means making a mistake over and over even when you know it's wrong.

Answer 4

I liked it. I can understand the point and the reason of repeated words. Don't let other people get you down saying it isn't good because you are an amazing poet. If you read it with a steady pace as I have then you can understand the meaning behind the words. It takes time to understand poetry. It took me three times to read it before i actually found the right pace so I could actually understand it but besides that it was awesome.

Answer 5

I like it. It seems like a random string of thoughts, but you can feel a deeper meaning hidden underneath.

Answer 6

Just a list of random thoughts. No rhyme, no reason.

Answer 7

forgettable collection of words, weak images/