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Two Brothers....One Night....poem, tell me wah tyou think?

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Tears freeze on my face in the middle of Summer,

My skin is freezing as my heart is now ice,

The loved I had was taking away,

And that one cold summer night.

Like a breathe of fresh air I never received,

It's not funny to be this far away,

I'm sailing on a ship that lost in the sea,

Your love I can never replace,

Oh brother you are the only one,

Who was there to keep me strong,

But as the days get old and cold,

I turn a relise God's not the one.

For to late I've been all my life,

So maybe I can find answers within a knife

Don't look down at me and think,

'what a pity he could have been me'

So long to you my one true friend,

You are my poem in the end,

Like a brother should a brother would,

Go in battles for you, but I'm not strong enough to win...

My brother died in a drunken driver hit and run...still havent found the guy!!

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  1. it is very interesting I like the understory you can tell that there is some personal and some fictional parts I think with a little tweaking it could be very good.

    Have u ever thought of a poem kind of happier/sadder where it has a deep contrast? Where every other line contradicts each other.


  2. oh, its kinda good

  3. aww yes that`s very sad, and you expressed what you`re going through with a poem. The cold represents much in this poem, it especially represents how your`e feeling after the loss.

    That`s therapeutic. I really hope you feel better soon since it seems you two very close.

    I pray you get well.

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