U like this poem?

Question

girls guys its all the same

pink sheets ona blow up bed

the air is deflating but there is no power to inflate

all we have is our breath whcich is tired from shoppinfg

what shall we do?

we are havinga sleepover for more than 2

a day of shopping is tiring

we need our rest for a new day tomorrow.......

Answer 1

hahahhahahahahha

this reaaaalllyyy sux

Answer 2

What's its name?

Answer 3

uhhhhhh O.O wow............. umm im not gonna be rude like everyone else but i am going to say...wheres the rhyming?? maybe read some poetry online. its ok everyone needs practice. im sure EVERYONE has a not so good poem that they first wrote that theyre hiding under their bed......

Answer 4

it's ok, kinda cutezy...needs more spunk. Go deep or funny that will draw the attention of readers in more...you lost me after "shopping."

Answer 5

its good except for the few spelling errors. You should try to put more purpose into it. Its kind of flat. And really pointless to write about but its still cool that your expressing yourself through poem! :)

Hope this kind of helped? :)

Answer 6

whaaaaa?!?!?!

um...wat r u, like, 6?

Answer 7

uuuuuh...

Answer 8

This poem is really fantastic

Answer 9

uhmm eekk i love poetry

i can send you some i wrote

but idkk

Answer 10

excellent with theme and thought

Answer 11

wow this kinda sucks

Answer 12

Boooooooooooooooooooooooooooo ! Get off the stage !

Answer 13

call it Free Prose Poems.

Answer 14

this is a good poeme for teenagers and young people

most poems are mostly old peopleish and you dont understand eny of it

but this is realy good

keep on doing this kinda stuff

Answer 15

wat??? r u okay??