Ummm, Random Poem by Me.

Question

I'm just an ordinary girl,

It's simple you see,

I can't be anything, other than me,

I don't always say the right thing,

and sometimes it's like I forgot how to walk,

I laugh alot, and she loves to hear herself talk,

I spill things in akward places,

I pick my nose and make funny faces,

I always need to know what they're talking about,

She likes to scream and sometimes I shout,

I'm just an ordinary girl,

It's simple you see,

I can't be anything, other than me,

I like to hunt for stars in the middle of the night,

I'm a firm believer, that its all gonna be alright,

I like coffee in the morning, warm and sweet,

I always wake up late, I just want to sleep,

In and out of sunrise, lazy green eyes,

Reveling the dreams I had last night,

She always laughs, when the time isn't right,

She's not good at keeping a secret,

and you shouldn't tell me yours,

I'm sort of clumsy,

and sometimes I walk into doors,

She's better, after she's had a drink or two,

If I saw you once, I'll be sure to remember you,

I get deja vu, all over the d**n place,

And I can't seem to forget anyone's face,

I like pretty things, but there's so much more to life,

One day I'll be a mother, One day she'll be his wife,

I'm just an ordinary girl, It's simple you see,

I can't be anything, other than me,

I like to paint a picture, or take one of you,

and sometimes I wish, I didn't have so much to do,

I wish time would stop, we could travel the world,

Us on a beach, just for forever,

And her world's okay, as long as we're together,

I get excited over the littlest things,

And I think it's funny when he starts to sing,

He sings her a song, and he'll sing it all night long,

And she laughs like she's drunk all of the time,

And when she writes, she likes to rhyme,

She always cries, and I hate to cry,

And sometimes when we meet, they think I'm shy,

But then I'm real loud, and I can't sit still,

I'll do anything just to feel,

Feel something great, feel something new,

But all I want is to be with you,

And she lives in the everyday moments,

Seeing the beautiful in the world,

Because she's just an ordinary girl,

It's simple you see,

I can't be anything, other than me...

Answer 1

Girl, U R fantastic. And no wonder, a girl who gets dija vu (s) and loves painting that much, has to be born poet.I have the hunch that U adore music.Its all over Ur poem.A symphony that catches the breath.

I ain't goin to say nomore

Girl, don't give me that stare

I wanted to shut this computer

But Ur poems tied me to the chair

God bless Your heart ..

  

Answer 2

its pretty good...

the only thing i would say is that it

changes from the pronouns from she to I / me

i think it would be better as a song, if you want it to be a poem; go through it and take out any unessesary words, because each line sounds a little wordy, while most poems only have the words in it that are needed to depict the subject...(take out pronouns and some 'and')

Answer 3

nice poem...it kinda sounds like a mixture of songs ive heard haha