Untitled poem , your opinion?

Question

in a gaint fountain

in an infinite hope

we're together til' the death separates

as a scream in a dark forest

as a tear in a great river

that's the way i think of you

and each second is superfluous

i'll never forget your stare

and i'll never erase your beauty

i wanna feel your deep voice

and wanna touch your hand's skin

i just wanna feel you and me til the end

but you brought with you hopes and disappointments

all the promises and words,we felt like two different people

Answer 1

Like it, very nice!!

keep it up

Answer 2

not bad,,,u shall make it a little deeper

Answer 3

Very good poem.

Answer 4

To me, it sounds like it's unfinished. In the begining you're talking about how much you want to have a good relationship with the person; the end seems cut off, the last 2 lines being the only negative thoughts about the person. I'd want to know more about the differences between the two people that make them unable to have a relationship.

That's my thoughts.