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Question

There might be an intelligence agency or two,

that MIGHT just want to kill me...so, how are you?

Anyhow, anywho... I'm getting bored with all that;

and I'm still living, so I want to forget that c**p.

Having that bit of stress... well it gets annoying.

Toying with this messy h**l of thoughts with laughter.

Kakistocratical schemes; I'm occasionally destroying.

Catastrophic dreams of a utopia raised - I'm enjoying.

Until that idea seems more likely and realistic;

For a little while, I'll be this suicidal-ish me.

Yelling, more internally than externally,

As I'm getting sore of all of the rivalries.

Settling myself down by wearing myself out;

I'm wondering if anyone cares what I'm about.

- J.M.

Answer 1

The fact that you're still alive is something to consider.

Good luck avoiding those suicidal thoughts as much as possible.

Answer 2

very deep...BTW only you care what you're about..face that and your life will be happy...you dont need validation from anyone!!

Answer 3

It's a hodge podge of miscellaneous thoughts which don't flow.

Answer 4

i like it in a way that it shows how you are feeling in different aspects of what you're thinking at that moment and it has good useful words in it and i like the fact that you shared the thoughts without trying to rhyme in every verse it's different and you still got your point across well. the last bit was nice!!!! im liking

Answer 5

"Settling myself down by wearing myself out;

I'm wondering if anyone cares what I'm about"

I love that you should write songs, I'm not going to rate or critique Ur poem because this is whats inside you but I'm so glad I read it... personally I like it... you should write more...