Want ur opinions?

Question

after a long writer block i fiinally wrote 8 poems and i decided to share with u this poem

a luv story

what happened to u ma heart

y every night u ask me about

about that great passionate award

that i gave hjim with an infinite amount

he always ask me y

y i gave him with no affection

but u really dunno y

i gave him all that attention

he often asks me

r u w8ing 4 a giving

or u just dunwant an ending

4 that gr8 feeling

u feel just with me

u dun w8 4 his heart

2 make a single sign

sign even not with this amout

u gave him with no w8ing

is it only admiration

or a sign of challenge

am i really in an attraction

or i'm just inspired by him

finally my heart gave up

and he told me

i only advise u not to use up

all the luv that's me

THE END

i know there r some missing balance but i haven't write since exams i'm glad to see ur opinions all plz :)

Answer 1

i think they're all right, but the grammar and spelling issue makes it difficult to focus and find a flow or  rhythm in it.

but if you fix that i think they would be fine, yes =]

Answer 2

Agree with first answer. sorry!

Answer 3

I love it.

Keep up the good job and I want to see more of your poems. I love poems I just suck at writing them. I njoyed yours though.

Excellent

Answer 4

i loved the poem.my favorite part of it was this,i felt this poem very touchy =)

"he often asks me

r u w8ing 4 a giving

or u just dunwant an ending

4 that gr8 feeling

u feel just with me

u dun w8 4 his heart

2 make a single sign

sign even not with this amout

u gave him with no w8ing

is it only admiration

or a sign of challenge

am i really in an attraction

or i'm just inspired by him

finally my heart gave up

and he told me

i only advise u not to use up

all the luv that's me"

Answer 5

i have trouble reading i would fix you grammar before u post it for other people to read

Answer 6

yeah well its v gud bt i had trouble readin nd yeah u need to balance somethngs.....bt other than that it gud :D

Answer 7

Some parts are good,some not.

and the word "amount" doesn't fit in this type of poems.

Using numbers for letters and using "ma" heart..etc.

all this actually cut down on the meanings and depth of your poem.

with just a little work it could a whole lot better cuz its not that bad.