War is for fools poem ?

Question

Who invited war into our homes?

It’s a bitter pill to swallow

That sends us all to the gallows

It doesn’t matter

if your rich or poor

crying at someones store

or on the floor

Even if you’re a good fellow?

It’ll make you sick and yellow

It turns our lives upside down

And ground us into bones

Some say there is profit in war

But for me I’m not so sure?

I’d rather see my fellow man alive

Smiling with his family

Staying alive

Than a lost soldier drowning

Or dying down a rabbit hole

Who invited war into our homes?

I think it stinks

I think it’s a sin?

I wonder where it all began

Someone took something from someone

Without letting on

Then the other later found out

A war of words went on tow

Then blood started to flow

What a shame

What a mistake

Our lives sometimes come down to fate

Jesus just opened

the door to heavens gate

Answer 1

Concept...I'd give you a "7"...execution, a "5".  Tighten it up...try to say the same thing with less...create more images and do less telling...try to set up situations where "we" come to the same conclusions...instead of just telling us what we should think...and remember that not everyone who fights a war wanted to have a war in the first place...some just didn't want to speak German and wear a swastika.