Was It Worth It In The End. PLEASE RATE, COMMENT, ETC.?

Question

Was it worth it in the end,

Or did that house get awful cold?

The years have not been kind to you,

you're getting awful old

'I want this, I want that'

Thats the thought that left you with squat.

I knew you're demise was coming

As soon as you tied the knot

Oh is he nicer then me?

Girl, don't even make me laugh

But I can't help but giggle,

You didn't even leave with half

You should see my lover,

she's the reason I forgot you

I liked you for 10 minutes

And it's time to say adieu

Bye bye silly girl

Good ridance silly girl

No more things to ask you,

just try not to hurl.

It makes you sick to your stomach

But it also eased my pain

Yay, the good guy won!

And realized that you're quite plain

'Please, please, forgive me'

You tell me as you shiver

'Girl it's to late for that,

time to cry me a river!'

So was is really worth it?

Seeing that you're heart had flipped

I hope you're not too cold

Lieing in you dark old crypt

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Answer 1

change your awful in the first stanza into awfully. The tone is bitter, and I wasn't inclined to finish it, the rhyming scheme didn't work fo rme either. I can tell you have real emotion there though, and with polishing it will end up great. stay strong.

Answer 2

That was d**n good.

Wish I could muster the courage to say that to my ex who came crawling back. Bravo!