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Was wonder what your thoughts are on this poem I wrote

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The Fabric.

The mouth runs dry

In a spew of profession

False questions of why,

With slight regression.

Dance in the now, they say.

It truly matters not.

And the shame of how,

Will all be forgot.

Our minor crimes are lost

In the shadows of great deed.

And will absolve us all,

Of our pettiness and greed.

Stand straight when it suits

And sway with the need.

The end justifies the means,

But still the means to an end.

The fabric breaks at the seams,

Just like their crooked smiles bend.

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  1. Started a little slow for me but I really actually liked it.  

    The last two "sections" were well written.  I usually do not like the ones that rhyme, I feel like people force it a little. Which you may have at the beginning.  

    Refreshing.  Most poems here run out of steam toward the end.  I felt like yours built.  

    Favorite line" Stand straight when it suits, And sway with the need.


  2. mehh, is ok.

  3. It's very beautiful and comforting:)  My favorite part is: "The end justifies the means, but still the means to an end."  

  4. This is wonderful! My favorite line as well is: "Stand straight when it suits, And sway with the need."


  5. yep

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