Wedding Vows- Revised?

Question

Everywhere I go and everything I do I see your face and I love you. I think of our bond and I rejoice in knowing that I've found the man to share my future with. The man I will rely on when I'm weak and will support when times are tough. The man I will create a life and a family with. The man I will always be faithful

to. I love everything about you. I love our eyes secretly giving each other confidence. I love your touch. I love everything we share and will share in the future. I promise to be with you always, where the wormth of our love will melt the winter snows. You have such a deep understanding of who I am, I hardly have to speak any words and you know just what I'm saying. I love you with all of my heart.

NOTE: It may seem long when written and read to yourself, but when spoken aloud it's quite shorter than you'd think. Thank you for all of your opinions!

Answer 1

this should help

http://www.freewebs.com/weddingforum/

Answer 2

I thought I advised you to look for an English teacher or some grammar police, LOL.

You write: rejoice in knowing that I've found the man to share my future with.

Shouldn't it be:  Rejoice in knowing that I've found the man with whom I will share my future???

You write:  The man I will always be faithful to.

Shouldn't it be:  The man to whom I will always be faithful???

Find yourself a grammar expert or an English teacher, please.  It still needs some work.

And too, you need to concentrate on what you are promising.  Think more about what promises you wish to make to your groom  . . .  and skip some of the mushy stuff.  Remember, Grandma and Great Aunt Sally will be listening.  They won't like that "I love your touch" part.  You need to leave that out.

Answer 3

If you want some inspiration, these are the personal vows my husband and I wrote:

http://www.freewebs.com/steveandmelissa/...

If you want more extensive help, please e-mail me. I'm a writer.