What's your opinion on this short poem?

Question

Under the Tree

You sit with me on the bench

Under our favorite tree

The magnolia swinging gracefully

In the cool breeze

We sit there without saying a word

An unspoken, unbreakable bond

Of love and friendship floating all around us

And in this moment

We are both, truly happy

I wrote that btw. it just sort of came to me

Answer 1

no dice. no thanks.

Answer 2

well i like it.

poems could be anythinnng !

Answer 3

Easy to understand.

I like this one:

saving all missing full of ocean

calm,bright and neat

your arm embraces me as a sleep town

my dream is beautiful and long ahead

I might can't translate it entirely, but I like the poem full of imagine

Answer 4

Well...

I like the story, but the poem just doesn't match.

Because of the rhymes.

Some things rhyme, somethings don't, and

some rhyme in the wrong places.

For Ex.:

You sit with me on the bench

Under our favorite tree

The magnolia swinging gracefully

In the cool breeze

It just doesn't flow.

But you do have nice potential because you have

good themes for your poems.

Try opening your vocabulary, and if you use

Rhymezone.com

You can find synonyms, rhymes, definitions, and everything.

So you can think of better rhymes, and different words

to diversify the poem.

I find it very helpful.

Good Luck.

Keep writing!

Answer 5

I think it is well done! Anything that is from your heart and spirit is a perfect poem.