What Do You Think Of This... Any Good?

Question

Everytime I see you with her it slowly tears me apart with each glance

My longing heart can no longer sheathe all the words you alone inspire

They bleed down to the threshold of my soul and await your sweet touch

You cause my world collapse to your feet, around you my spirits weak

The sound of your name makes my body tremble, I can't even breathe

My aimless emotions are worn to threads and my tears, unable to cope

I've somehow lost myself in you, but you seem to be simply out of reach

You haunt my dreams and carefully slip like a theif into my turbid mind

There I can hold you in my arms and always protect you from the pain

I'm under your alluring spell, why can't you just let me love you silently?

Unfortunately, I'm only dreaming dreams, for I know you don't think of me

All that I have left is my desire to try and teach my heart to forget you...

Answer 1

I think it is very good.In fact when I read it in your profile I wondered who wrote it.

Answer 2

i like it :] <3

Answer 3

Nope, it's junk.  Sorry.  You're not the writer you think you are, Rena.

Answer 4

its okay.