What Do You Think Of This Short Story?

Question

http://xkannax.deviantart.com/art/Grandma-79974099

I was at my grandmother's funeral when I started to write this and I based it off of what my Aunt and cousin Joel did. Darien and Suu are my cousins and the story is supposed to take place from my Aunt's point of view. These are my views of Death and what happened while I was at the funeral and what I think was going on in my Aunt's head. This is based off of a true story, so ... yeah. It's not the best, but I guess it's okay.

I'm only nine, so don't expect much.

Answer 1

That was great! Especially for a nine year old! You have a very good vocabulary. Are you sure that you actually wrote that?

Answer 2

good story