What Do You Think Of This Song I Wrote?

Question

Is This The End

V1

I looked into your eyes

Waiting for a response

But all I can see are lies

And then I get lost

Chorus

It's like I don't know you anymore

Once you left you closed the door

Never to return again

So is this the end

Because nothing's the same since you left

V2

Do you realize what you did

I breakdown from what you said

Say you didn't mean it at all

But then again you like to see me fall

Is this why you walked away

From all the things you couldn't say

Chorus

It's like I don't know you anymore

Once you left you closed the door

Never to return again

So is this the end

Because nothing's the same since you left

V3

I miss talking to you

You're so different then I knew

Claim you're happier alone

Don't you miss the things you've known

Everything's changing fast

Still nothing's clearer than the past

Bridge

I try hard to keep strong

But it's been so long

And it seems so wrong

Without you here

Right next to me

Like it Used to be

Answer 1

I think its good, i mean its kind of depressing, but still good :]

Answer 2

You did good.

Answer 3

i think its good!

Answer 4

It has great lyrics ... just need music behind it and Jason Castro to sing it!

Jason Castro 2008!!

Answer 5

Its realy good but here are some tips

- the verses are a little to short so c what u can do to them to make them longer

- it all seems to rhyme to much, maybe instead of putting the rhymes next to each other put them a space apart with something else in between them

thats all i can give u but just play with it a little and see what comes out

hope this helps

:)

Answer 6

I'm a Dreadhead Duhhh,

From a professional stand point, I truly like your song. But I must tell you that your subject matter is the stuff millions of songs are written on and that is why I'm giving it a low grade.  You are saying nothing ground breaking or new and it's boring that you could let someone take you into a false sense of security that you can sit down and write about it! The girl leaves guy thing is so played out already and this work is not adventurous or exciting to read. You sat down and wrote it and I sat down and read it and neither one of us went anywhere. There is zero imagination..  Grade  C -