What about this flyer? CHECK THE ENGLISH AS I SPEAK SPANISH PLEASE!?

Question

• Tired and overworked?

• Do you want to grow your business and make it sounds more professional?

• Do you spend a lot of money in costs of operation?

Let Us Help You Grow Your Business

Smart VOS

Virtual Office Solutions

Smart VOS is a solid organization whose core principles reside in offering virtual office solutions for your business at competitive prices. The structure of the company has been customized to fit the needs of today’s professional, offering administrative solutions for you or your business.

What we offer?

Smart VOS bilingual STAFF will handle each of your calls in a prompt, professional and expert manner, will coordinate your events, take customers orders, plan a trip for you and call your customers whenever you need with your own local phone or toll free number with customizable scripts, voicemail, electronic fax, call forwarding and many other benefits!.

Which is the difference with a traditional receptionist?

Basically the costs of operation, you can reduce up to 5

Answer 1

Está cansado y sobrecargado?

• ¿Quiere hacer crecer su negocio y hacer lo que suena más profesional?

• ¿vas a gastar mucho dinero en costos de operación?

Vamos a ayudarle a crecer su negocio

Smart VOS

Oficina Virtual de Soluciones

Smart VOS es una sólida organización cuyos principios fundamentales reside en ofrecer soluciones de oficina virtual para su negocio a precios competitivos. La estructura de la empresa se ha personalizado para satisfacer las necesidades de hoy en día profesionales, ofreciendo soluciones administrativas para que usted o su empresa.

¿Qué ofrecemos?

Smart VOS personal bilingüe se encargará de cada una de sus llamadas de forma rápida, profesional y de expertos manera, se encargará de coordinar sus eventos, tomar órdenes de los clientes, planificar un viaje para usted y para llamar a sus clientes siempre que lo necesite con su propio local de teléfono o número telefónico gratuito con personalizable scripts, buzón de voz, fax electrónico, reenvío de llamadas y muchos otros beneficios!.

¿Cuál es la diferencia con la tradicional recepcionista?

Básicamente los costos de operación, puede reducir hasta un 5

Answer 2

What about this flyer? CHECK THE ENGLISH AS I SPEAK SPANISH PLEASE!?

• Tired and overworked?

• Do you want to grow your business and make it sounds more professional?

• Do you spend a lot of money in costs of operation?

Let Us Help You Grow Your Business

Smart VOS

Virtual Office Solutions

Smart VOS is a solid organization whose core principles reside in offering virtual office solutions for your business at competitive prices. The structure of the company has been customized to fit the needs of today’s professional, offering administrative solutions for you or your business.

What we offer?

Smart VOS bilingual STAFF will handle each of your calls in a prompt, professional and expert manner, will coordinate your events, take customers' orders, plan a trip for you, and call your customers whenever you need, using your own local phone or toll free number with customizable scripts, voicemail, electronic fax, call forwarding and many other benefits!

Which is the difference from a traditional receptionist?

Basically the costs of operation, you can reduce up to 5

Answer 3

Looks good from a language aspect...

From a marketing aspect I'd cut out ALOT of words, make it simple.  They'll ask questions later.

Answer 4

The only thing i would change is instead of saying "grow you business" say "expand"

Answer 5

Mucho bueno, pero cinco que?

Answer 6

¿• Cansado y abusado?

¿• quiere usted crecer su negocio y hacerlo parece a más profesional?

¿• usted gastan mucho dinero en gastos de la operación?

Déjenos Ayudarle a Cultivar Su Negocio

VOS elegante

Soluciones de Oficina Virtuales

VOS elegante es una organización sólida cuyos principios principales residen en el ofrecimiento de soluciones de oficina virtuales para su negocio en precios competitivos. La estructura de la compañía ha sido personalizada para encajar las necesidades del profesional de hoy, ofreciendo a soluciones administrativas para usted

Answer 7

•Tired and overworked?

•Do you want  your business to grow?

Do you want  your business to be more efficient?

•Do you spend a lot of money for costs of operation?

We Can Help Your Business Grow!

Smart VOS

Smart VOS offers virtual office solutions for your business at competitive prices. The structure of the company has been customized to fit the needs of today’s professional, offering administrative solutions for you or your business.

What do we offer?

Smart VOS has a bilingual STAFF that will handle each of your calls in a prompt, professional and expert manner. We will coordinate your events, take customers orders, plan a trip for you and call your customers whenever you need.

We offer customizable scripts, voicemail, electronic fax, call forwarding and many other benefits!.

How are we different from a traditional receptionist?

The cost of operation is much less!

Answer 8

Do you want to grow your business and make it *sound* more professional?

Answer 9

On the second line it should be sound not soundS. I don't know about business but I think the third line should be "Do you spend a lot of money on operation costs?"

and it should be "what do we offer?' or just "what we offer"

customers' orders

Answer 10

bueno

Answer 11

that's really good ad :] just make sure you specifi when you say "you can reduce up to 5"--->reduce up too 5 what?

Answer 12

where it says "what we offer?" it should say "What do we offer." There is no word for do in spanish so I understand why you left it out....I took spanish 1.

STAFF should read staff. no caps needed

Then it says "will coordinate your events"

it should say we will....you have to put the subject

also start another sentence with that.

So...We will coordinate your events, take customers oders, plan a trip for you, and call your customers when necessary with your own local phone or toll free number. We offer customizable scrips, voicemail, electronic fax, call fowarding and many other benefits!

and at the end it just ends...so i'm wondering if you have it all there