What about this poem?

Question

I like to say that I love you

Is it me or is it you

Is love in me

Or is love in you

Are we on drugs

Is love on drugs

Who is loved

Who is loving

Why is love not a lover

Will I ever love me

As my own lover

Or are you the one and only

Lover of me

Answer 1

Doesnn't exactly follow the normal flow of poetry, which I think is fantastic, it fly's in the face of confornment and stature, I believe the emotion is sincere and imagery is flawless, very brave to use this type of format, well done.

Answer 2

is the word love starting to sound weird to u or to me

so much love in this poem isnt right

unless u need love

or do i need love

r u on drugs or is love on drugs

Answer 3

i think its cute

Answer 4

Frina,

It's like this question:answer thing but you're talking to yourself! In that last stanza you are tripped up on reaching the outcome because you seem to have drifted off from your purpose...  Grade  B -

If I say "I Love You"

Is the 'you' me or you?

Do I have love in me

Me in love have I do?

Love is the drug

Drug is the love

In love am I?

Or are you in love?

Why is love not the lover

If I say that I love her?

No, I'll say that 'I love him'

In a poem to show him

The lover in me

Loves me and you

So be true -

To the lover in me.

Answer 5

ummmmmmmm *cough* where is the poem? I don't want to be overly mean, so i won't say what i think about your "poem". Learn how to construct your poems better, put more feeling into your words....just delete this poem and never write another one like it again.

Answer 6

Ignore the negative comments.

I was in a creative writing program for three years.

It won national awards.

and trust me, the poem's good.

Not great, but still, really good.

The only thing I think you should change is 'why is love not a lover'

or at least give that an explanation. It's kind of scattered.

and after the drugs thing put something along the lines of

'cause something feels unreal'

Answer 7

i like it but the part that you say will i ever love me as my own lover sounds like you are talking about masturbating you probably arnt but thats what popped in my head

Answer 8

nice but not to fond on the drugs part not that its bad but it sounds funny and pretty weird how cud love be on drugs if u love sum1 u wundt lt tem take drug haha lolz jp