What do think of this characters description in my story?

Question

This character in my book is named Joshua Nighte.

He has long black hair, puppy like black eyes, high cheekbones, smooth copper colored skin, he looks like a young spirited type. He is six foot and has a very good built body. He usually wears plain white shirts, a beanie, and khaki shorts but for a reason.

What do think of him?

Answer 1

He sounds really good-looking! What is his personality like though?

Answer 2

its good but like make him not to perfect like he had pinples other then that really really good

Answer 3

ummm... he looks too perfect. Make him have like slightly chubby cheeks or something like that. Tell us about his strengths and flaws so we can decide on his personality  -ROX

EDIT: that makes him a Gary- Sue. He needs to have flaws too. I think protectivness in his case is good. A flaw would be like clumsy, selfish, slow, stupid,... He needs to feel real to the audience. No one in the world is perfect, so no one would be able to relate to him.

EDIT again- sorry about the first edit. I was writing it when you posted his flaws

Answer 4

He sounds pretty good and the name works with the description but maybe you're revealing everything about him to early? Only my opinion though he sounds like a good character

Good luck

x

Answer 5

Hes ok...

actually..he sounds pretty good.